There's a lot here, bro.In v 2, beginning of second line, shouldn't 'Be' be 'Am'?I feel there is something about the order of the ideas which each verse represents, which needs to be rearranged. I don't mean within each verse - just the order of verses, but... the chorus may give you leeway to leave them as they are. It is very much the glue of the whole hymn.Hmm.... still thinking... possibly, the difficulty arises most because of verse 3, which anchors the thinking to earth. I like that verse, though. Now I don't know if you've already juggled the order of verses and presented your most meaningful choice, but, how does this read, to you?Start with me, Lord, start with me,Be I acceptable to thee?That on that day my works abide,'Cause on the cross my sins were tried.Chorus:Then we which live,Meet Him in the air,Christ's risen dead with us,To stay with Him there.Look to thee, I look to thee,No longer fastened to a tree,You gave us not of Hiram's gold,But holy fire that we'd be bold.ChorusWhat are these, sir, what are these?These are they that while on their knees,Passed great tribulation's blood, And now they drink a living flood.ChorusOh to see, Lord, oh to see,We sinners broken at your feet,Our multitudes upon the ground,Our contrite souls receiving crowns.ChorusLastly, I'm not sure about this couplet, 'Passed great tribulation's blood, And now they drink a living flood.'partly because of Revelation 1215 And the serpent cast out of his mouth water as a flood after the woman, that he might cause her to be carried away of the flood. 16 And the earth helped the woman, and the earth opened her mouth, and swallowed up the flood which the dragon cast out of his mouth.
